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CRAZY STORY I WROTE. ONLY HALF OF IT.
Chillisa wanted her life to be normal; she was a born with a powerful evil. She was an outcast and no one wanted her. She would be sent to hang if ever found, she couldn't¯ï¿½ï¿½t have friends or family the evil inside wouldn't let her. One side of her wanted to be loved, but the other side wanted pain and suffering for all. So to ease both sides she fought and killed the evil, but the only way to ease the other side was to find love, which was just a big joke to the evil side. It laughed and said, Who would love you, you are beautiful but anyone can see what is in those red eyes, and those red lips¯ï¿½ï¿½, she fell to her knees and said, I will fight you, but she knew it was getting stronger and hungrier for the blood of the evil and innocent. One night she heard a woman screaming for help, two men had chased her out of the village. They started mocking and screaming at her, the tall lanky one said, �no one can hear you out here¯ï¿½ï¿½. She started to run and fell on a rock, which broke her leg. The fat and short guy said, No more running for you and grabbed her, that's when Chillisa came down from the tree. Chillisa looked at the two guys and said "Let her go or I will kill you with out a regret". One of the guys said aren�t you that frecky demon girl they want to hang, they're offering a nice amount of shillings for you. I say about 900 "that are enough to feed me forever", one of the guys said. She then laughed and said, "If you want me come and get me". Both jumped at her she sat there with a smirk on her face. With speed she took out her bone breaker sword and killed the two men in a matter of seconds there bodies fell to the ground limp. She then looked over at the girl who was scared out of her mind. Tears down her face, for a little while Chillisa saw herself as the girl who was crying, she wished she could cry but no weaknesses were aloud if you were a demon. She walked to the girl and raised her sword ready to kill the girl in one swoop. Lets pause here for a second, for there had been someone watching her in the darkness of the night. So when she readied her sword the person came out and grabbed her she fell over and hit her head. All she saw was a fuzzy figure standing over her she was out cold and when she awoke she was in a cage big enough for her to walk around in. She tried to stand up but the blow on her head cause too much pain it was a first time in a long time that she felt pain. There was food on the other side of the cage turkey legs and peas with corn. She then look down and saw her weapon was gone she looked around the small area and screamed where�s my sword. Her eyes were a red that glowed in the dark, anger and pain surge throw her body. She screamed and laughed then slowly moved her hand to her side and grabbed a knife and thrown it toward a black figure in the darkness. But in her eyes she could see it was a man he caught the knife she sat back against the wall and said in a low voice "Dead is a gift from the heavens waters". And then it began to rain the man moved in side the hut she was still stuck in the cage she closed her eyes and listened to the screams and blood spills of the night. Morning came and she woke wondering if she could get the man close enough to kill him or even get a look at him before she killed him.
Average Grade: C+      

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Matt 27-May-08
That is the most BORING thing I have ever heard!!
Baltazar View Profile 16-May-07
I sense great maturity in you as a short story writer. Although there's hardly any depth in this story, it's quick entertainment and had me engrossed for the moment. Andnot too bad a story teller either. A+





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